#1
crit4crit

WHY? WHY? WHY?
I never understood why
You cross through the marsh
When you could just use to bridge.
Sure it rocks back and forth
But you've been in shakier
Places, so tell me what gives?
I guess it was fun
Getting down and dirty
With the leeches in the swamp,
But don't leave your heart exposed
An open invitation
For them to drain your blood.

Better hurry up and cross
To the otherside
Where the fields are as green
As a wallet full of cash,
Before I see it as an eyesore
And burn the bridge to ash.

Maybe you think there's too much
Water under the bridge
Or there lives a hungry troll;
Maybe you gave your all
To the ungrateful
And can't afford the free toll.
Maybe you're just immature
And a bit naive
And just like to play in mud,
But remember when
You step into quick sand
No one's gonna pull you up.

Better hurry up and cross
To the otherside,
Where the fields are as green
As a wallet full of cash,
Before I see it as an eyesore
And burn the bridge to ash.

I wanna choke you so you never say
I love you to the undeserving,
Cut your hands off so you never hand
Your life to a fradulent merchant.
Mostly I wanna put your heart in a jar
In a box of treasured keepsakes,
Instead of the others who just leave it
In the sludge at the bottom of a lake.

Better hurry up and cross
To the otherside,
Where the fields are as green
As a wallet full of cash,
Before I see it as an eyesore
And burn the bridge to ash.
Last edited by themarsvolta at Sep 13, 2011,
#2
wow....my mind is full of images and smells of water, mud, grass money, It invoked a lot of emotion inside of me to....I think i can relate a bit.....yeah i can.....ok on the second time through i find one thing i dont think flows well.... the last line of the first pasage just doesnt flow with it as i read....idk how to describe it better. It might be because of the way you are going to vocalize this at the end of the verse......

c4c????...

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1479670
I haz gotten gud