#1
Not sure what section this should go in, so if this is the wrong place please tell me and/or move it.

My band wanted me to write something ambient-y. I have no clue how ambient music sounds though. I just kinda experimented with different delays and stuff. I recorded this in one track, since I have no real recording gear. It's just a drum track and guitar. I couldn't settle on a good distorted sound for the chord i play throughout the song. It was really weird. Like it would sound good playing it, but recording it would come out really really distorted, more than I wanted. That's the only part I'm not really happy with.

http://soundcloud.com/permaphrost/atmosphere

Constructive criticism please. I think it sounds fine but I'm looking for other opinions. Mainly concerned with the transitions, and the solo-y part.

Also: Fair warning, about halfway through there is a really big distorted sound, like the bass in the chord I was playing got magnified like crazy. I don't know why.
Last edited by Permaphrost at Sep 19, 2011,
#2
That wasn't bad. In terms of general advice - you might want to consider getting some more layers in there and switching up the drum track once in a while. But I understand that these could be a result of your recording situation. Anyway, you should be able to get multiple tracks into Audacity or something similarly free.

For some part-by-part crit:
- The intro is pretty cool and I like that little riff you have going.
- 0:21 - I like the guitar sound here actually and this is a cool part. Almost reminds me of something by Cloudkicker.
- 1:16 - nice riff, but would be cooler if it was layered on top of a rhythm section (possibly the chords preceding it?)
- 1:54 - don't know what happened with the sound there for a second lol. I'm not too fond of the section from here until 2:26. It feels like a filler as it is, so unless you're planning to put some melody or something there, it's pretty boring.
- 2:26 - a nice section but could be improved with more layering and adding bits here and there. I think this is inadvertent but you have a couple of places where your volume swells and then recedes slightly (e.g. 2:41-2:48). This is a cool effect and you might consider making the dynamic changes in this part more prominent. It would make it stand out more and have more purpose.
- 3:14 - again kind of a boring riff with nothing else on top of it. Nice outro though. It'd be cool if you had a layer continuing that chugging 3:30 part underneath the rest of the outro. It actually sounds like it might be there? Or maybe I'm just hearing what I want to hear lol. But you can afford to make it more prominent.

So yeah. Cool piece overall and that was my constructive criticism.
#3
Quote by alexbass
That wasn't bad. In terms of general advice - you might want to consider getting some more layers in there and switching up the drum track once in a while. But I understand that these could be a result of your recording situation. Anyway, you should be able to get multiple tracks into Audacity or something similarly free.

For some part-by-part crit:
- The intro is pretty cool and I like that little riff you have going.
- 0:21 - I like the guitar sound here actually and this is a cool part. Almost reminds me of something by Cloudkicker.
- 1:16 - nice riff, but would be cooler if it was layered on top of a rhythm section (possibly the chords preceding it?)
- 1:54 - don't know what happened with the sound there for a second lol. I'm not too fond of the section from here until 2:26. It feels like a filler as it is, so unless you're planning to put some melody or something there, it's pretty boring.
- 2:26 - a nice section but could be improved with more layering and adding bits here and there. I think this is inadvertent but you have a couple of places where your volume swells and then recedes slightly (e.g. 2:41-2:48). This is a cool effect and you might consider making the dynamic changes in this part more prominent. It would make it stand out more and have more purpose.
- 3:14 - again kind of a boring riff with nothing else on top of it. Nice outro though. It'd be cool if you had a layer continuing that chugging 3:30 part underneath the rest of the outro. It actually sounds like it might be there? Or maybe I'm just hearing what I want to hear lol. But you can afford to make it more prominent.

So yeah. Cool piece overall and that was my constructive criticism.


Thanks man. That's helpful. I know what you mean about the layering thing (and I generally love multiple layers) but I was just coming up with a nice outline to work with my band on. at 1:54, I know it's kind of boring and it is kind of filler, but it's the only sort of transition I could find to get to the thing at 2:26. I think the volume swelling at 2:41 is just a byproduct of the delay and me playing louder/softer at times. The chugging part at 3:30 was intentional.

So yeah I'll have to experiment with some layering.