#1
This is going to be the 2nd track on an acoustic/alternative/whatever EP I'm currently writing and recording. Let me know what you guys think of the lyrics! and of course, I'd be glad to critique your songs as well.


Awoken from the usual dream
In a daze, feeling so at ease
But it hits so deep (but it hits so deep)
When the day lights these empty sheets

And I wonder; I wonder what went wrong
Why this month felt so long

(You'll drift away) breathe in reality
(You'll drift away) but it's more than I can take
(You'll drift away) breathe in reality
(You'll drift away) though I don't feel the same anymore

So why has it taken over
The longing to place the blame
Now the future, it has to suffer
'Cause the past was mine to claim

And I wonder (You'll drift away)
I wonder what went wrong
And I wonder (You'll drift away)
I wonder why I had fallen to my knees
But you were never there to break my fall

Here's the instrumental track for this song -
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RhENe-KUVN0
Write the music you want to hear.
#2
these lyrics are really good . . . . .though i wonder why you have written two stanzas only i suppose . . .in the chorus, the lines you mentioned in brackets . . . is a second voice i suppose . . it would be wonderful if it was a strong female voice . . you know like Amy Lee or something . . .
the outro or that last stanza is the best part of these lyrics>>"I wonder why I had fallen to my knees
But you were never there to break my fall" amazing line . . .