MetaIronForce
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Join date: Oct 2009
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#1
This is an improved version of a song I posted a while back called 'The End Of The Show'. It now has a better title, and a better lyrical subject in mind, though I haven't actually written the lyrics.

RSE Youtube Video

GP5 File

Please listen in RSE (via the youtube link if you don't have it yourself). It will sound rubbish in midi.
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bingeandletgo
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Join date: Oct 2007
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#2
Great song! I liked almost all of it, especially the intro solo and inclusion of the piano. The only thing I would work on is the middle guitar solo. It's a little boring and too structured, if that makes any sense. Other than that, you have a fantastic song! Reminded me of Guns N' Roses.

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Last edited by bingeandletgo at Sep 25, 2011,
MetaIronForce
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Join date: Oct 2009
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#3
Quote by bingeandletgo
Great song! I liked almost all of it, especially the intro solo and inclusion of the piano. The only thing I would work on is the middle guitar solo. It's a little boring and too structured, if that makes any sense. Other than that, you have a fantastic song! Reminded me of Guns N' Roses.

C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1482539


Could you elaborate on 'too structured'?
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bingeandletgo
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#4
It was like "straight eighth notes", then "straight sixteenth notes" the triplets, then a tapping solo with the same pattern throughout. Basically no rhythmic flair and has very boring phrasing, partly due to RSE and not an actual guitarist.

You also need better transitions between solo A, B, and C. They are too cut and dry. Remember how I said it reminded me of GNR? Let's use Sweet Child of Mine as an example.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1w7OgIMMRc4&ob=av3n

Slash's solo starts out pretty calm at 2:34; he's using the neck pickup and there isn't much distortion on either guitar. Then BEFORE the next part at 3:07, he switches to his bridge pickup while the drums and rhythm guitar build up. This is a good example of using all of your instruments to transition. Then, at 3:07, he starts picking harder and uses his wah/vibrato more liberally. At the same time, the rhythm guitar is more distorted and aggressive, and the drummer hits a little harder. Then at 3:30, he picks up speed and is the climax of the solo, much like your tapping solo. Then the intensity drops. Notice how all of those transitions were natural/smooth, flowed very well, and as a listener you probably didn't notice those changes too much due to the fact that they flowed so naturally.

Hope that little analysis helped!
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