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#3
I thought it was pretty catchy, I like it, but I think it would sound infinitely better in a finished recording.

I think at the 1:28+ mark when it changes up, the vocals could use some serious varying up, they're far too reminiscent of the first half. The last 20-30 seconds were also quite repetitive and then the song just ends that way. Could definitely use some kind of closer to add on to that.

Great start though, you should definitely polish this up and record it if possible!
Thanks for checking out Ashiteru!
#4
It's a good song with good vocals
my only problem is the rhythm is good but the playing is a bit clumsy with some strings being hit that shouldn't be. Keep working on it and it'll be tight though!