#1
I'm crawling through
A drowning rainforest
Feet foward and head up
Watching soaked leaves
Get bombed by clouds

Ripple in the puddles
Splatter on the mud below
Thought I'd get more peace
Than back at home
Oh don't take me back

People keep telling me
'Find your own way out'
I'd rather you came here
Drag me out of this hole
You would if you cared

The tall trees are breaking
Up all the sky's acid
Into little beads I drink
Branches fold out
They're my protectors

I don't like it here really
I want it to be better
Than back there but
The shower on my back
It's eroding my weak spine

People keep telling me
'find your own way out'
I'd rather you came here
Drag me out of this hole
You would if you cared

Droplets are ripping up
The flowers like my stomach
Tear those chickens flesh
Time for me to wander back
To where my problems started
#2
i like this. the only line i have a problem with is "... those chickens flesh" if you mean cowards i think you should just say that. its more powerful and also goes back to the repeated w sounds throughout