#1
A song I wrote randomly this past summer and I was looking through my song book and decided, what the hell I'll put it on UG. So tell me what y'all think.

Hear voices in your head
Voices that aren’t there
Schizo is what the doctor says
Take a pill a day
It’ll make the voices go away
Only drawback is that it takes yours too
You will finally be happy
I don’t promise you!

(Bridge 1)
Don’t worry if you hurt
I’ll take it all away
Then I’ll give it back five times worse the next day
Don’t cry my guinea pig
You don’t even matter
You’re just my lab rat
Doesn’t matter if you die
No one will miss you
Just one less mouse to chase after!

Can’t sleep at all
Hear the howling in the night
Insomniac is what the doctor says
Take a pill a day
It’ll make you fall asleep
Only thing is that you’ll never wake up too
You can finally get some rest
For all eternity
You won’t wake up tomorrow
I promise you!

(Bridge 2)
Doesn’t matter if you hurt
That’s how it’ll be everyday
Just let me experiment on you my child
If something bad happens
It won’t even matter
You’re just my lab rat
Doesn’t matter if you die
No one will miss you
Just one less mouse to chase after!

(Chorus)
Let the doctor take your hand
I’ll lead you to the dark room
I’ll diagnose your problem
I’ll make it disappear
I just hope you don’t treasure your life
Because you won’t make it out of here!

(Face melting guitar solo played by the one, the only, Patrick Ellis!!!!!!)

You love yourself one second
You hate yourself the next
Bipolar is what the doctor says
Take a pill a day
I’ll make you only one person
I’ll take the other you away
Only thing is you will be gone too
Both of you will be lying in the same grave
Now that I promise you!

(Bridge 1)

(Chorus)
#3
what genre will this be in?
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So i suppose 2+2=4 is a stereotype as well?




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#4
Quote by BluePaintCult
I'm sorry that I have to be so blunt, but I found this to be terrible and hoped to never accidentally stumble across this piece again after reading the first few stanzas.

That's fine


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what genre will this be in?

I'm thinking about going for a thrash metal kinda thing, but not full out speed, slowed down a bit. I guess the speed of Angel of Death after the fast intro.
#5
Hey we all have to start somewhere....I think this particular Uger is only 13..not too bad...but...stay awake in English class and pay attention...and write constantly....and read the lyrics to every song you like... good luck to you in your future writings.
I haz gotten gud
#7
Quote by ApatheticMe
Hey we all have to start somewhere....I think this particular Uger is only 13..not too bad...but...stay awake in English class and pay attention...and write constantly....and read the lyrics to every song you like... good luck to you in your future writings.



Ah, man, it blows my mind that there are people that young here haha! For a 13 year old, this is some solid stuff. So forgive my negative comments before, thread starter.

I'm 23 but I actually joined UG when I was about your age (14, actually)

When I think back to the stuff I used to write back then I shake my head in shame.

That said, keep it up.
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Quote by BluePaintCult
For a 13 year old, this is some solid stuff. So forgive my negative comments before, thread starter.

It's all good man!