#1
My pen to the paper

My heart to the mind

I tried to write down these feelings on paper

But the feelings, they just grew

So did the amount of papers

They grew into a stack

The staples could no longer go through

Then into a lofty skyscraper

My thoughts could no longer be quantified

That poor pens ink went dry

But my heart just overflowed
#2
Cliche, cliche, cliche

BUT! Done in quite a good way.
At the first lines i thought "Just another 'I want to tell you how much I love you but I can't'-poem". But at the line "But the feelings, they just grew, So did the amount of papers", thats where it's getting intresting.

I think the end is a bit lame though, it feels like you just stoped writing because of the pen, not because your feelings where impossible to explain in words. Almost like you're giving up your will to show your feelings. I would try to make the ending more powerful... as powerful as your feelings.

I would also try to make i a bit longer.

All in all I think it has potential to be really good.
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#4
Quote by Smokegt2
My pen to the paper

My heart to the mind

I tried to write down these feelings on paper

But the feelings, they just grew

So did the amount of papers

They grew into a stack

The staples could no longer go through

Then into a lofty skyscraper

My thoughts could no longer be quantified

That poor pens ink went dry

But my heart just overflowed


I'd agree with what the others said, it's good but it needs to be a bit longer to get somewhere more, more powerful.

To the bold, i read it better as 'my thoughts, no longer quantified' for some reason.