#1
A new song! Yay!

Time has been too short
I checked my watch, it says
Quarter to death, dear me
I never did speak to you

I lost your face, where is it
Or where are they, should I say
One halfs in the puddle I know
The other's still in my hand

Carry on, you carry on
I let it pass me but now
The memories never will
And It's worse when thats
All I ever remember
Because nothing else is worth it

Time has been too short
I checked my watch, it says
Five to death, dear me
I never did speak to you

Carry on, you carry on
I let it pass me but now
The memories never will
And It's worse when thats
All I ever remember
Because nothing else is worth it

You're gonna kill me now
You don't even know it
You're gonna kill me now
You don't even know it
#2
Great piece, I think it would go really good with music...

The line "Because nothing else is worth it" doesn't sound amazing with the other verses in the stanza. Maybe take out the word 'because'. That's just my opinion, though.

Try to have the stanzas the same length. It just goes better if you're just keeping it in the same time signature, and it also sounds better if recited.
#3
However, if you dig changing time signatures, it sounds ballin'

I enjoyed this, agreed with the "nothing else matters" not fitting in.

The second stanza is really my favorite, it seems so wonderfully clutterred, making it seem like we're really in your head as you're thinking this up.
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