I would of turned the vocals up a little. I'm not sure I like the effect on the vocals, sometimes it sounds great, and then in parts where you don't change notes it sounds a little weaker. I would of overdriven it a little more. I really like the lo-fi approach. I thought the end could of been better, you either should of ended during the last chorus right then, or gone somewhere else. The vocal melodies and lyrics are great, I don't listen to the Deftones so I can't comment on that, but I like it the way it is. Great job. Really good song. C4C?