#1
PLEASE CRIT ME I'M AN AMATEUR WRITER

Rampant,
he runs the lines with caution,
watching, waiting,
whos to hear?
nothing if no man speaks,
whats to lose?
the words seem to fail,
but what's to the hearing?

Frustrated yet?
So are they,
atmospheres unsettle,
the precedents prevent the tools,
the loon wonders,
to no avail,
ancient teaching inspire,
he receives the message.

Are you finally listening?
This could be it,
prevail, prevent,
the voice is mirrored.


What is it? The way I express the struggles I deal with writing lyrics and inspiration to make music. If anyone reads please let me know what you think? C4C ofcourse :p
Last edited by PENGNASTY at Oct 19, 2011,
#3
Quote by baryss
What kind of music make your band ?


Well the band that I'm currently in his like, progressive hard rock.
Last edited by PENGNASTY at Oct 19, 2011,