frankibo
UG Board King
Join date: May 2007
3,093 IQ
#2
That jazz was ****ing sexy. ****ing sexy.
Didn't like the drums at Riff 5, too slow.
Otherwise well done, excellent song.
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Todd Hart
Do Sadists go to Hell?
Join date: Sep 2009
153 IQ
#4
This is undoubtedly one of my favourite songs I've heard on UG. Very good. The drums were a tad lacklustre at times, but it didn't detract from the piece too much.
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Semola94
semola94
Join date: Jul 2010
920 IQ
#5
Quote by Todd Hart
This is undoubtedly one of my favourite songs I've heard on UG. Very good. The drums were a tad lacklustre at times, but it didn't detract from the piece too much.

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Taclite
Registered User
Join date: Jan 2007
253 IQ
#6
Quote by Semola94
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Riff 2 sounds like it's straight out of a point & click adventure game, along the likes of Deja Vu.
MorbidAngel1989
Registered User
Join date: Jan 2010
187 IQ
#7
Pretty interesting piece. Like others have said the drums are lacking. Maybe making them interesting can make the piece livelier? The piece itself is well done otherwise. Riff 2 actually kinda reminded me of Santana-esque Latin music type stuff a bit. RIff 3 does sound like something from a game though. Riff 5, that whole section kinda boring imo. Not much going on with average guitar riff. Riff 6/Verse 1 sounds awesome though I like that riff with the piano going with it. Chorus was alright. Wasn't a big fan of the guitar part personal but w/e. Everything except the guitar riffs at Riff 7 was awesome, even the drums. Verse 2-5 served their purpose, individually they are okay together it works out. Riff 8 was pure awesome. The solos would sound much better with real instruments instead of crappy MIDI. The drum build up in Riff 9 could've been done much better. Maybe starting with a ride and then to crash cymbals, maybe have some toms or snares if you want. And really accent the last hit before going into the verse. I really liked this piece overall, very different. C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1499928
Semola94
semola94
Join date: Jul 2010
920 IQ
#8
Quote by MorbidAngel1989
Pretty interesting piece. Like others have said the drums are lacking. Maybe making them interesting can make the piece livelier? The piece itself is well done otherwise. Riff 2 actually kinda reminded me of Santana-esque Latin music type stuff a bit. RIff 3 does sound like something from a game though. Riff 5, that whole section kinda boring imo. Not much going on with average guitar riff. Riff 6/Verse 1 sounds awesome though I like that riff with the piano going with it. Chorus was alright. Wasn't a big fan of the guitar part personal but w/e. Everything except the guitar riffs at Riff 7 was awesome, even the drums. Verse 2-5 served their purpose, individually they are okay together it works out. Riff 8 was pure awesome. The solos would sound much better with real instruments instead of crappy MIDI. The drum build up in Riff 9 could've been done much better. Maybe starting with a ride and then to crash cymbals, maybe have some toms or snares if you want. And really accent the last hit before going into the verse. I really liked this piece overall, very different. C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1499928

Thanks for your helpful suggestions, I will try to improve the song, especially the drums, perhaps with the 'help of my drummer