#1
Decent song of my, I think. I particularly like the ending. Thoughts?

Critic for critic, RSE, headphones, etc
Also, in the crit, if you could rate it /10 that'd be cool too.

I extended the song in a attempt to make the song longer, but I dunno if it really fits well. The song ended at bar 83 before so tell me whether the new stuff is good or not?

EDIT: made a slight change at bar 122
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Last edited by Joshua1207 at Nov 8, 2011,
#2
Thanks for the crit

OK, so, I don't have any headphones near me right now so I'm listening to this without headphones and with RSE.

Here we go:
Well, intro starts kinda weird :P
First bar makes me feel all bluesy, but the second bar breaks that.
Bars 14-15 sounded like something from the Mario Bros theme
The overdriven guitar comes in nicely. Feels a lot more indie now.
The acoustic part is also a bit blues, in a good way. Fits nicely
The outro on the jazz guitar is great, my favorite part of the song I guess

Um... that's it? Kinda very very short, and it's a shame cause I think this can go to many more places.

For a very short song it's good, I just think you get more out of it. Still, I'll give it an 8/10

Last edited by Shaharz at Nov 5, 2011,
#5
Sorry for critting back so late. I was really busy.
Anyway, I think your songs are too messy, they have too few discernible or memorable ideas, and those that have potential, like bars 37-44, are presented in such a chaotic way that its hard to enjoy them, even after many listens. The bass is also too dissonant on some parts, (for example, bar 2), and it doesnt create a cool or interesting effect, its just jarring and distracting. That said, its hard to judge non-instrumental songs without the vocals. Its just a completely different product, and much worse, because of the excessive repetition and lack of melody.
To sum up, its got potential, but definitely consider those points I made.