#1
Verse:
I am a plague
The all human shit
**** this life
Take another hit

If I cant see it
Its not there
Blow me away
I don't care

So stab my veins
Break the flow
Barely breathing
Don't let it go

Chorus:
What have you done
That can be seen

Have you really cared
You've broken at the seam

What have you done
That should be held

Dear to all
Clear to none

Verse:
Burn the candle
Light the flame
Watch me fade
Don't take the blame

Curses follow
Time remains
Your fight is over
Don't take the pain

Say goodbye
You've been bit
As you die
Enjoy your last fit

For the last time
Let light fade
Stop your crying
End this charade

Chorus:
What have you done
That can be seen

Have you really cared
You've broken at the seam

What have you done
That should be held

Dear to all
Clear to none

Postchorus/Final verses:

Beg, steal just make it real
Finish as you started
Obey the departed

You've seen the end
So repeat the start
This is your heart

Now you've been here
Don't come back
You're a ****ing hack

Dear to all
Clear to none

Your life
Can't be undone

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Love to hear some opinions thanks
#2
"So stab my veins" line needs to be changed i think, try get a more violent word for stab.

maybe change
"Have you really cared
You've broken at the seam
to
"did you ever care?
or was it just a scheme?"

but yeah pretty good