#2
Hey man, checked it out...
Nice piano intro... it builds up in tension nicely...
Why no vocals? It sounds like a great song to sing along... The synth is gorgeous...
I repeat, a good lyric and voice would fit the song just great.
Excelent cuts too, that guitar enters so wildly and aggresive... i love that...
Nice tune.

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#4
I found it a little boring. Might be because I find pianos boring in general. :p You've got a great starting point. Add some more layers to it. Make it build up even more!

On the mix: The kick would sound great with some more bass (boost around 45Hz, don't cut too much mids). I don't care much for the guitar tone. If you're just recording the guitar once, pan it a little to the left/right, or double track and pan both sides. Needs more stereo!
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#5
in my opinion the piano tone could use some EQing it seems a little dry and too bright maybe harmonize and add a reverb so it wont seem stale

a double bass could make the drums a bit interesting

i think you should add another riff in the mix instead of having the guitar play the same tune as the piano

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#6
reeverside,
Thanks for the reviews! Now your "Song A": the keyboard melodies sound nice, especially the piano. I'm not fond of the first rhythm guitar, perhaps because of the tone, maybe it's the chords, maybe both. I like the beeping sound at 2:30. The guitar at 2:45 sounds a lot better to me than the earlier guitar. Song sounds good overall. Your name sounds Russian, yet you are in the U.A.E. I'm curious if you went to the U.A.E. for work or ? Sorry if I'm being nosey, I just find it interesting that people from all over the world are at this forum.
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#7
Good work on the piano, dug that alot. Guitars could be mixed better, double tracking would work. Like someone mentioned earlier this song needs vocals, thats a good thing. Good build up, very tasteful with the synth. Overall a well written tune, just needs a few tweaks here and ther with the mixing, and needs a vocalist.
#8
Quote by aaron aardvark
reeverside,
Your name sounds Russian, yet you are in the U.A.E. I'm curious if you went to the U.A.E. for work or ? Sorry if I'm being nosey, I just find it interesting that people from all over the world are at this forum.


Yeah i am Russian, but i am living in UAE since my childhood, with family, for like 15~ years, now i am 18 so whole life here), but still every 2-3 years i am in Russia on a summers, cause it is extremely hot in Dubai=)

Thanks for the comments everyone!
#9
Hey thanks for the crit of my song!

I like how the intro builds up into the guitar parts, and how everything sounds (except the guitars :/). I don't really have anything to criticize musically, but I would try to work on the guitar sound a little. To me it sounds a little flat like somebody is playing out of a practice amp or something. Other than that, good job man!