bassburton
Multi Genre Influenced
Join date: Jan 2007
1,365 IQ
#1
So I came up with what I think is a pretty cool riff the other day. I tabbed it out and added drums and bass. Then I added a clean break and a solo in each section. Anyhow, I wanted to hear other people's thoughts on this "piece." All input is appreciated and as always... C4C.
Attachments:
Djentcore.gp5
The clock strikes midnight
When tomorrow and today collide
The moon is at its highest
And the twilight seems fitting
For in these moments
The light at the end of the world
Shines like a thousand suns....


Victor Gutierrez
KirkChicoHammet
Registered User
Join date: Apr 2011
177 IQ
#2
Hey there

I think this is pretty cool, nice riffs you got there, when I saw djent on the thread title I thought it woulde be either something very interesting or very boring

Well, the first riff is great, and the drums are nice. Nice. The lead after is cool, reminds me of Wave of Babies (Animals as Leaders), but I don't know why xD. Anyway, cool solo.

The clean part is really great! I like the way you worked with the chords, and the drums are nice too. The solo here is more melodic, I like it better than the first one...

Well, that's it i guess. I can't say anything helpful, but great riffs you got there.

And if you wanna C4C you could check this link https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1489244
bassburton
Multi Genre Influenced
Join date: Jan 2007
1,365 IQ
#3
Well, you got some great riffs there. The only real problem I find is the one section where youu have the 16th note bass scale, you need to get yourself a good bassplayer for that. Maybe raising it an octave wouldn''t be a bad idea either. I like the clean chords and the last section with the guitar ringing out the best. Overall, it needs some work to be fleshed out into a proper song; but it has some great potential.
The clock strikes midnight
When tomorrow and today collide
The moon is at its highest
And the twilight seems fitting
For in these moments
The light at the end of the world
Shines like a thousand suns....


Victor Gutierrez
frankibo
UG Board King
Join date: May 2007
3,093 IQ
#4
What you've got here is a very good and very original post hardcore piece. Excellent leads, clean part was lovely too.
Not djent though, at all.
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Colossus
bassburton
Multi Genre Influenced
Join date: Jan 2007
1,365 IQ
#5
Update: I added a whole bunch of other sections into the song. Namely: A pre-chorus, chorus, 6/8 section after the clean break, followed by a throw back into the first two sections and finally a more metalcore outro break. I also added a "secret" extra instrument.
Attachments:
Djentcore.gp5
The clock strikes midnight
When tomorrow and today collide
The moon is at its highest
And the twilight seems fitting
For in these moments
The light at the end of the world
Shines like a thousand suns....


Victor Gutierrez
kylendm
Baronboi
Join date: Aug 2006
8,191 IQ
#6
Sounds pretty good but I wasn't fond of the rhythm guitars in the intro. They are a little too bland and simple compared to the rest of the song. I also feel the intro is supposed to catch you and want you to listen to the rest so maybe working on that could help the song a bit.
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