#1
i can almost see the snow over the hills
i can almost wake without sleeping
nondescript houses, push perfect outward
delineate the conifers, brighten the corners
illuminate the secrets we've been keeping
oil-stained driveways like suburbia's bleeding
and they know - you know? about the cold
about us, treacherous scum, getting old
still relentless in our selfishness
mismatched gloves, unpolished loves
but hey first chance we get, we'll forget we did what we did
we'll set fire to one another -
we'll pour out the scotch and let the neighborhood watch.
(when i look at you, looking at your shoes
i wonder - what do real people do?)
#4
Effortless to read, lovely.
Favourite line: mismatched gloves, unpolished loves
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#5
I was so taken by the noun version of neighborhood watch that i grazed over the period to see what the neighborhood watch was doing then i saw the parenthesis and realized. That made me grin pretty big.
your play with common terms like that and references is always so great.
oil stain blood and mismatched gloves- you do these things better than anyone
loved it
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#6
Quote by #1 synth

this.

welp. this cements it. gonna go look through the forum for everything you've ever posted.

and jimi. that catch was awesome. i too read it with the title in mind as a single thing but saw the period and was like "oh." thanks for that opening me to that other reading.
the only people for me are the mad ones, the ones who are mad to live, mad to talk, mad to be saved, desirous of everything at the same time, the ones that never yawn or say a commonplace thing, but burn, burn, burn


#7

welp. this cements it. gonna go look through the forum for everything you've ever posted.

no joke, its worth it.


PS your sig, Nick (hah what a fine coincidence of names), was an incredible moment after reading the ending
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Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
Dream about me
Last edited by jiminizzle at Nov 29, 2011,