#1
it seems to me, recently
that the world is easier to see
in reds and blues
copper tones and aqua marines

my jeans and slacks have gained another size
and i'm fighting the lack of man i've come to comprise
it's like making music missing chromatics
i'm writing dissonant lines

i look and see those who revel in the textures of days
while i conflicted; i the color blind painter
strive to show black and whites in new ways.
Last edited by pixiesfanyo at Jan 12, 2012,
#3
I like the first stanza.
The first two lines of the second are a bit awkward and I don't understand what you mean by "I've come to comprise".
Third stanza: the first line is terrific, last line should read "strive" not "strives".
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