#1
Unholy By Misunderstaning

Laid out
On a consecrated bed
Bound to the frame
In throes of a fight
With a demon
That was never really there
Two occupy a single bed
Singing and spewing
Cursing and blessing
A constant struggle
Between
Lunacy and sanity
Unholy by misunderstaning

The faithful image
Of a world beyon
Lit by neons
Spelling out
Prideful declarations
Ruled over by
A dark figure
Full of hubris
Embodiment of hedonism
Enticing the sleeper
For they do not see
The duality
In a singular being

Unaware of the reality
Crushing the mind
Like a pick
Driven into ice
Creating
An unclean split
Condemning the sick
By misjudgin the ilness
For they cannot comprehend
The concept
That everybody
Has their own
Personal hell
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Before anyone asks : it's for a Prog/Melo DM song
There's a few lines I love in this one, but I'd like to know what do you guys think. C4C of course
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#2
The entire piece, while full of imagery, did not seem (to me at least) to have a very followable concept or story behind it. the imagery itself was questioning and dark, which i enjoyed.

Overall, you displayed a talent for creating a dark set piece, fill it with a character or even a concept that (again, at least to me, i might just be missing it) is followable.

If you've got a minute, id appreciate a C4C. Links below. Thanks!

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1501724
Too lazy to come up with a clever or relevant sig.
#3
Well, I don't have a habit of just writing something straight up, most of the time I prefer to come up with a concept before I start writing.
The concept for this one actually came out of the blue, I was trying to figure out a topic for some new lyrics, and I started thinking about witch burnings and exorcisms. So those particular lyrics is about medevial christians (and generally religious people) misconstruing personality disorders (in this case schizofrenia) as demonic possesion. At the most basic the first and third verse are about that, while the second one is about the vision of glamourised hell the schizofrenic is supposedly in.
Gear:
Electric
2008 Epiphone G400 Heritage CherryFUBAR
2008 Ibanez GRG 170 DX
2009 Cort KX1Q
2011 LTD H 351 NT
Randall RG 50 TC
Ernie Ball 11-54
Acoustic
Dean Markley
Dunlop 10's
#4
This is quite dark and mysterious sounding, though the meaning behind it is difficult to interpret at first. All in all it would fit in very well with a metal/goth type of song.
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