#2
Having no idea of what type of song this is, I can only make wild recommendations.

Try to find a way to get to the V chord and build on that.
Find some little riff that a big drum fill can fit over, or that the whole band can hit together, with a stop right before the chorus.
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#3
lol it would have been handy to know what kinda chord progression you have there... just out of the blue it is kinda like impossible.
#4
A musical break always works in metal and rock - everybody stop playing for the last quarter note of the verse or so, maybe have just a drum fill or a vocal over it. Check out "Radar Love", the way he ends the chorus to go back into the verse.