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CLICK THE LINK FOR THE SONG>>> http://soundcloud.com/george-wakerley

I wrote this song entirely by myself. Want opinions on the general songwriting and the lyrics. I didn't perform the vocals and I know that they are out-of-tune at points. Th guitar solo has been cut out (not the fade out/fade in halfway through the song) and I haven't added drums yet

I need help creating a better intro

Here are the lyrics:


Verse
All the times I have tried to breathe
And all the times I’ve tried to see
Always behind but yet
Never knowing just why

Chorus
I’ve been waiting my whole life for this
And I’ll tell you now it’s true
I never thought I would end up here
But it’s all because of you

Verse 2
I am the no one you all pass by
But then one day you all came along
To show me the way of a better me
As I transform into a new entity

Chorus

Final Chorus
I’ve been waiting my whole life for this
And I’ll tell you now it’s true
I’m growing stronger each day
As I make my own way
I’m growing stronger each day
I'm a whole new soul

Outro
I'm growing stronger each day
I'm a whole new soul
I'm growing stronger each day
I'm a whole new soul (Rall. on this line)
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