Hey people, i had written this song and recorded it with my band,also please checkout the song on the given link below ...Constructive criticism is highly appreciated..... Please feel free to help me improve on my songwriting....

The Only Alternative

Sometimes i feel im flying
attempted suicide happy
I feel im a dead man walking
confused deranged alone

Sometimes i stare in deep abyss
Confused deranged life of lies
Hated deeply im not dying
Help me drown coz i aint drowning

Darkened blackened crazy

What does a deadman really feel, what is the first thing on his mind? Does this change the way you view the song?

Use oblique strategies to come up with unique and more interesting ways of saying things?

Hey nice music btw


think of your idea through the lens of the oblique phrase