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Are we living in colour now?
Everything's drenched in sepia,
Layers upon layers of sunkissed skin,
Come peeling off, you’re free again.

Bleeding from the fast-rotting River Gums,
Is the truth you hid all those years ago,
The branches will quiver with every gust,
But your alibi, it must die,
It must.

I know you want to go to a country where it snows,
But you can’t.
The solace that you seek, it will only make you weak,
It will only make you weak.
If we go swimming in the rip,
We cannot blame it for the white lies on our lips.

Are we living in colour now?
We painted this whole ****ing river brown,
I’ll burn every bridge in this island dear,
I’ll be stranded forever beside you here.

Do you really want to pack it in again?
There’s no use changing,
It won’t change them.
I'm here to help

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ok, as usual pit is being very unhelpful except andychalmers, so im gonna go post this someplace else


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andychalmers102, that story is awesome.
#2
Nice one.
Suggestions: delete all the occurrences of 'the' in the second stanza (improve your flow).
3rd stanza: condense things again a bit more, e.g. maybe substitute 'wanna go'.
Your first stanza is the best, but the last is close.
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