Haha, I just transcribed this exact excerpt a few weeks ago. You have most of the notes right, but you're not getting the correct rhythmic feel and articulation. I think what you should really take away from this solo, aside from the amazing lines he created, is how he goes about approaching those lines physically. If you listen more closely to the recording, you will see he's playing a lot of the notes in a different place than what you came up with, and that's really important to understanding how to better your own playing. For example, he doesn't sweep those ii V's because he uses his thumb. He also doesn't go across the strings as much as you do. That's all very indicative of how he's able to sound like him.

If you want I can send you a PDF of my transcription.

...modes and scales are still useless.

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