#1
Heres a song I made. Acoustic verses and "in ya face" refrains!

I am looking for something,
something that lasts for longer than Tomorrow,
I don’t,
I don't feel like chasing you,
chasing you no more,
I know I deserve so much more,
I am not worthy of this anymore
But I keep feeling this way,
Im sorry this cannot be controlled!

((iNNAN REF))
From the start it surely felt right,
but why does it change upon the approach of the night?
Why do my feelings change so fast?
I knew from the beginning that this wouldn’t last.
fack my lifeeeee
fack my life..!

Ref

Girl, why do I keep doing this to you?
Why do i keep doing this to me..
I cant lie,
no i can't lie to you,
but I don’t know if its me or you.
(Slowing down)
I have been giving this some thought,
but the time i have spent it's without results..

((heavy part of ref))
This is true:
Im looking for something,
something that ****ing lasts!
This burning feeling is unstoppable!
This basic instinct is unstoppable!
I was thinking with my **** not my heart!
Im sorry, it cannot be controlled!
I can't control this any more!

<- Instrumentalt/soloaktigt

Vers:
I think I have slept, slept here for too long.
oooh I see clearly now,
i see, i see what I did wrong,
all i wanted was to get inside of your ****ing thong.
Wherever I go I’m never in time
i'm always to late
You aren’t,
no you are not a friend of mine,
you're making me blind you twisted,narrow,bitchy mind
I can't see clearly now,
I keep feeling this way,
this damn basic instinct's got hold of me,
Im sorry this cannot be controlled!
No i can't control the thought of you in thongs

always from the start it surely feels right,
but why does it change upon the approach of every night?
Why do my feelings change so fast?
I knew from the beginning this wouldn’t last.
fack my lifeeeee
fack my life..!

Refr
Girl, why do I keep doing this to you?
I cant lie to you, but I don’t know if its me or you.
This is true:
Im looking for something, something that ****ing lasts!
This burning feeling is unstoppable!
This basic instinct can not be stopped!
Im thinking with my dick,
not my brain, or my heart
Im sorry,
it cannot be controlled or stopped!

((Instrumentalt à la Wes Borland))

((Bridge))

I tried to make those hook-ups come through,
you didn’t know you got lied to,
We could have hit the ceiling of the sky,
we were about to fly high.
But, my wings turned into wax!

((Heavy that slides into refrain))

Refr
Girl, why do I keep doing this to you?
I don’t know if its me or you.
Im looking for something,
something which is pure and true
This burning feeling inside of me sets me on fire,
every time you're around
This basic instinct in me is unstoppable!
Im sorry,
it cannot be controlled!
**** it!
**** my life!

((outro))
Instrumental that fades out

I love you but i have to go,
I need to find the right feeling i call love
I had her and i didn't really want to go
#3
Quote by vitorlp
Personally, I dont like it. :P

sorry for poor feedback.

Please elaborate