#1
it's been a rough couple weeks
it's the upkeep of staying down
been sleeping around the house
in search of lost dreams
in cupboards and photo albums
beneath vases and ottomans
(i'm also still finding your hairs
in our bed, in my bed)

and it's been a rough couple months
revising lists of 'i should've said'
washing and rewashing your favorite blanket
never getting warm underneath it

it's been a rough couple years
it gets harder to stay awake
even if i know it can't touch every place
(only the lungs, the stomach,
the whitish hair and the brownish vomit)
and i still sleep on the floor
hopelessly desperate and desperately hoping
that i might pull it together or pick up smoking.

(sometimes there's still blood in the sink when i'm sleepwalking.)
#2
The message hits hard, in the same vein as your usual voice - aching but in a distant way, almost afraid to admit it. The flow doesn't have the same consistence you usually have, it is just about right but there is an extra syllable here and there keeping it from reading effortlessly. Nice to read you, I hope you're doing well
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#3
There are some striking personal descriptive moments, but a lot of it for me delves into sentimental cliche. The first stanza fails to stand out and it felt like a chore reading through it to get to the 2nd stanza. Once finished, though, there were decent moments.

(only the lungs, the stomach,
the whitish hair and the brownish vomit)
and i still sleep on the floor
hopelessly desperate and desperately hoping
that i might pull it together or pick up smoking.

^This, however, was amazing.
Poor advice.
#4
Disagree about the cliche. It's gentle and weary - but not tired.
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