#1
Verse:
One poison drink brought to his lips,
Now anarchy brings apocalypse,
Annihilate authority,
And watch this generation bleed,
Destroy the bonds of misery,
Release your inner heresy,
No more TV to hypnotize,
No propaganda brought to our eyes

Chorus:
We have no motivation
For infiltration
Until we face our expiration,
We're a dead tree ready to catch fire,
We just need a spark to inspire,
Inspire the revolution that we
Need!


so yeah i still need to write a few more verses and a bridge but i thought i could get some extra opinions before i wrote the rest of it. tell me what you think? thanks
#2
I'm not really feeling it, breh. Then again, I'm not much for the whole "break from the government" political themes, either, because I see the importance in a strong central government, so I can't really give an honest crit.

Metal is divine, however, so I give you bonus points.
Well, I think I'll go turn myself off an' go on down
All the way down...
Really ain't no use in me hanging around
You know what I'm trying to say
Music, sweet music
I wish I could caress, and-a kiss
Manic Depression is a fustrating mess
#3
Quote by jazar94
I'm not really feeling it, breh. Then again, I'm not much for the whole "break from the government" political themes, either, because I see the importance in a strong central government, so I can't really give an honest crit.


Couldn't have said it better.

I can say, however, that your lyrics are good musically, just tell me what type of metal you are aiming for. Screamo? Black? Progressive? Alt. Metal? Death? etc.