#1
I sit at home
Wondering what’s the addiction
Hoping I can get some sleep in
Then I feel this pinching
Its in my pockets
And its feeding my addiction

Im Sick
and Im Sinking again and again
I'm Sick and I'm Sinking
Now tell me what I did wrong!

My last penny is spent
And you yell at me again
“Its Time for a Change”
“Lets hope we can get some sleep in”

Im Sick
and Im Sinking again and again
I'm Sick and I'm Sinking
Now tell me what I did wrong!

So pull down the crank!
Lets hope for 777
And for a brighter year
Cause –

Im Sick
and Im Sinking again and again
I'm Sick and I'm Sinking –
Now I’m no longer in it for you!


Notes: I'm not sure how well this flows its meant more for me and my post hardcore band - I yell the chorus and my guitarist/singer sings or possible speaks the verses. But other than that any tips or ideas you think would fit in with this? Or how about a title?
#2
To my taste i think the chorus comes to often.. You barely get to hear a verse before there is a another chorus. And i know i'm being a little traditional now (probably too much for your taste), but i don't think it would be a bad idea to put a bridge in it

Besides that i think it seems like a cool song! Especially like the last line of the last chorus!
No gear.. Just tits.. And some gear.. Mostly Fenders.. And tits.. A Takamine acoustic.. An Orange tube amp.. A shitty Fender amp.. AND TITS! And a big fuckload of pedals that i don't know how to use..