#1
while the winter was mild this year
the winds wildly swept the mountain shores
and though our eyes still shift sly, it's clear
that darker days hide a slew of horrors.
Quote by Arthur Curry
it's official, vintage x metal is the saving grace of this board and/or the antichrist




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#2
The first stanza of twenty? I could see this twisting and turning into some odyssey.
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i suppose there's a chance
i'm just a litte too shallow to consider
that maybe i've been a little more eager
each day to wake up and take a shower
brush my teeth and smile for the mirror
#4
the first line is too weak, you can say that in two words against something else and give it more of the movement it needs by putting in that something thats missing, and I think that something will be based on tension in the landscape. maybe wildly isnt doing enough to make the image more 3dimensional too. there could be more life in the mountains, and more at stake with them. reminds me of leaving blacksburg-- its a pretty road in the morning. I do like the sound play
Anatomy Anatomy
Whale Blue Review

Park that car
Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
Dream about me
#5
thank ya. this was undeveloped
Quote by Arthur Curry
it's official, vintage x metal is the saving grace of this board and/or the antichrist




e-married to
theguitarist
minterman22
tateandlyle
& alaskan_ninja