#2
I'd say you should slow down the tempo, but I guess that's just personal.
Pamposh’s final question before drifting into a state of transcendent ecstasy was, “But Master, if everything is an illusion, then why does anything matter?”

To which the master replied, “It may all be an illusion, but it’s a very real illusion.”
#3
Also the rhythms should be tighter in the performance. Either you're lagging or the pizzicatos are ahead.
Pamposh’s final question before drifting into a state of transcendent ecstasy was, “But Master, if everything is an illusion, then why does anything matter?”

To which the master replied, “It may all be an illusion, but it’s a very real illusion.”
#4
Well it's pretty cool. And yeah, I also think you could slow it down, gives it that extra creep-factor.