Nice, some really good melodies and the faster, rhythmic parts were really great Like you say, it could be tighter in places but as a song it's great. Recording quality is decent enough, could maybe be a bit more depth to it but it could be alot worse
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Always up for some C4C, been compared to Frank Turner, The Cure's Robert Smith and Bruce Springsteen so check out my stuff if you like the sound of that