#1
My first song, in the style of Frank Turner, its still a working progress so is subject to change,its not finished but just thought i'd ask for opinions

It's not long since you and I could of been,
Cowboys and Indians,
Heroes and Warriors,
Instead of living life on the binge,
You tore your page into pieces,
Lit up and burnt the script,
Sit back and dream about it,
Relax n' forget about it.
Just remember these few words,
You can be what you want to be,
You are your own enemy,
Sit back and write your script,


#2
First line should read, "could have been".
I think it is good enough so far, though breaking the writing up would help the reader more. Post the rest when you have finished.
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