#1
Hey guys, my friend mentioned wanting to record some post-hardcore style music, so I figured I'd sketch out some lyrics, I just wanted to know what you thought.

Everything being "Pinched" (Like so > this < ) will have growled,
Everything being pulled apart ( <this> ) is "Screamed" or just a high pitched growl,
and ^ This ^ is just singing.


>This is me,<
>Bringing something to frui-tion,<
<You never meant what you said,>
>That you that I was the one,<
>That you thought that we would last,<

^Here you are,^
^Still defending yourself in your own time of need^
^Trying to make yourself^
^look like victim in all of thiiis^

>Yet I know what really happened<
>You left me for someone who was never any good<
>Now I won't take you back<
>This was never apart of your plan<
>Sorry to disapoint<
<But I am above you!<

^Here you are,^
^Still defending yourself in your own time of need^
^Trying to make yourself^
^look like victim in all of thiiis^

Thoughts so far? Any input at all would help at this point, it's only about half done, haven't even brought it up with my friend yet.



Jeff
#2
I may just be reading it wrong, but it doesn't seem to be rolling off the tongue for me, but thats probably just because i don't have the same melody in mind as you... can you upload an MP3 With it?
#3
I would definitely have to agree with Nrsandback on this. It's very difficult to.picture how it goes. I would appreciate any audio you may have.