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I've been away from this forum for a while while the band finishes up our concept album. Here is the lyrics for the second to last song. Please let me know what you think good or bad and as always C4C!


Forged in the deep
As blazing the nebular star
Burning impurity
And Formed by the blows
Of first master and slave

But hark
Darkest smoke filled night
A curse was soon to be
When blood
(of the smith)
Struck steel
It’s thirst given birth

Screaming wordless commands
This blackened void reeking lust
Ore demanding souls

Before awakened weapon
He begged on wounded knee
Promising a child
His blood ancestry
Entwining, the unconceived

Living blade
Corrupted shield of man
Brother’s born in blood
Destined to meet again

To save the child,
The fool condemned
Buried the curse in his chest
In hopes it would never occur
The future it must infest

Father!
You can’t rend destiny
Your plans I have come to hate
Coward!
You have failed
And now it is too late
Far too late

The blade and I
Two halves of the whole
Born of a curse
We were destined to be
Twins born in blood
Our beginning
A beginnings end
#2
This is pretty Good, I hear it in my mind as kind of a Five Finger Death Punch feel, with the beginning starting off with maybe talking as the intro of the song builds the dynamics, and Growling Heavier Parts like
"Of first master and slave" moving into a very heavy minor low alto singing, Building Dynamics back up Growling at "Hark!" and kinda repeating that seriest of Dynamics through the song with Singing, and Growling, and all growling at the end with

"The blade and I
Two halves of the whole
Born of a curse
We were destined to be
Twins born in blood
Our beginning
A beginnings end"
before going into a sick guitar solo or something.
Thats jsut what I hear, I'd have to listen to what you got, but A+ Brother. Very Nice