#1
hi just wanted you're opinions on this song i wrote
maybe some constructive kind critism
its my first ever song attempt


WORK IT OUT

Never thought this love---- would be over
Its hangin on the back of my mind.....
I cant seem to just---- get over you
Im thinkin about---- you all the time.....



is there some way we can work it out
I cant take this pain no more no more
is there some way we can work it out
feel like im living no more


I never thaught youre love------ could hurt me
I cant feel the back of my mind.....
when I think of you I feel blue....
its hurting me..... over all the time.....

is there some way we can work it out
I cant take this pain no more
is there some way we can work it out
feel like im living in vain

can we talk about it
can we work it out
id love to talk about it
can we talk about it
can we work it out
id love to talk about it
Last edited by sleepingindiana at Feb 25, 2012,
#5
Bit harsh...
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#7
Ignore the trolls. It's actually pretty decent but I could imagine in a pop song rather than a rock song (if that's what you're into).
It's muh better than most pop lyrics these days (I'm not only talking about stupid hoe by nicki minaj)
#9
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