Wow I really dig your voice man! I wish i had a voice like that, emotional yet cool and badass.

The melody was really nice and I thought the lyrics were really good as well.

There were a few timing issues and you might wanna pick a smoother strumming pattern, try using a softer pick!

Really good song though, keep it up!

Could you crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1521949
I really like it, honestly. Your voice is really really good. The intro/interlude guitar part is really intricate and delicate. The song is eerie and dreamlike and the lyrics are detailed, descriptive and definitely not as cheesy as the ones you here elsewhere. Keep it up.