I like the music, but he singing seems out of tune. The lyrics aren't too bad either. At about 2:30, you should make that guitar lick a little bit louder. It seemed to get lost in the mix.

Edit: I listened to it again, and I think that the song would be better if it had a faster tempo. Just my 2 cents though.
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