#1
Hi guys

I have a new songs finished and I wanted to hear your opinion, wether it's good or not, you can give points (example: 10/10 for excellent).

Thank you much for hearing my song
Have fun!

Improof


Here a the lyrics (for midi and gp5):

--> You are:
[Verse 1]
Hey girl, be qui-et.
And on-ly hear my voice.

You know, you are
some-thing spe-cial for me.

[Pre-Chorus]
I am mes-meri-zed
when-e-ver I see your face.
And I feel warm and safe
e-very-time you are here.

[Chorus]
'Cause you are
the one who bet-ters the wea- ther.
And we are
al-ways, for-e-ver to-ge- ther.

And if you look to me
that I can see your shin-ing eyes
and your lo-ving-ly smile,
I can feel your sweet love.

'Cause you are the one for me.

[Verse 2]
You have the most
beau-ti-ful eyes of the world.

And you have the most
won-der-ful face of the world.

Please say me if you want to be
for-e-ver with a boy like me.

And if you say yes
I will ho-nor you girl.

[Pre-Chorus]
I am blin-ded by
your be-auty and per-fec-tion.
Will you be my girl
oh, I am sure that it's true.

[Chorus]
'Cause you are
the one who bet-ters the wea- ther.
And we are
al-ways, for-e-ver to-ge- ther.

And if you look to me
that I can see your shin-ing eyes
and your lo-ving-ly smile,
I can feel your sweet love.

'Cause you are the one for me.

[Bridge]
I miss you e-very-time
you're not by my side.
I want to be where you are,
cause you're the real deal for me.

[Chorus]
'Cause you are
the one who bet-ters the wea- ther.
And we are
al-ways, for-e-ver to-ge- ther.

And if you look to me
that I can see your shin-ing eyes
and your lo-ving-ly smile,
I can feel your sweet love.

[Outro]
'Cause you are
the one who bet-ters the wea- ther.
And we are
al-ways, for-e-ver to-ge- ther.

And if you look to me
that I can see your shin-ing eyes
and your lo-ving-ly smile,
I can feel your sweet love.

'Cause you are the one for me.
Attachments:
You are.gp5
You are.mid
You are.gpx
#2
It's a little simplistic and repetitive but it has decent melodies in it so I don't want to rate it because I feel it has more potential, although, I'm not sure why the vocal line is called "Electric Bass". Btw, you can put the lyrics automatically on the vocal line.

PS: I think the vocals sound similar to a Green Day song (from American Idiot?) in places but I don't listen to Green Day so I can't name the song.
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#3
Tach!

7/10

I really like the vocal melody and the chord progressions. You wrote some catchy lines and overall the different parts fit together well.
The PreChorus reminds me of Summer of 69.
Well, like Emperor's Child said the song has a lot more potential.
For example you could vary the rhytmic of the left hand, so that you build some tension.
#4
I really enjoyed this.
However for me, the vocals reminded me of "Fury of the Storm" by Dragonforce
I also enjoyed the chord progression and contrast when leading into the bridge, as well as the climax in the solo. That was indeed quite nice. I would agree with Matse though, in saying that you could vary the rhythm of the left hand. The straight quarters can drag on a little.
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https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1524798

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#6
@Emporer's child: It's only the pre-chorus which reminded me of Greenday, it's one of the parts in Jesus of Suburbia which is also reminiscent of the pre-chorus of Summer of '69 by Bryan Adams.

It's nice a song, nothing mind blowing but enjoyable imo.