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I wrote some lyrics for a couple of death metal songs, working on some riffs for them. I would like some criticism and comments about them though before I continue, just to see if it's good enough to deserve my time.

Blinded By Flies:

Verse 1:

No man's land is before me
It belongs to the beasts
Faces of the dead shine
In the light at my feet
Crushing on skulls
The great war machine is ruined
Breaking my bones
Putting a bullet right through 'em

Chorus:

We can't see the sun
When we walk in the ashes,
The stars are shining
We can't see the light
When the world is blackness,
We are blinded by flies

Verse 2:

Brained in a brutal way
That leaves one in a daze
But the machine still crawls on
Corrupting my rib cage
The stars shine brightly
Shadowed by smoke
I kill without mercy
They die without hope

Repeat Chorus

Bridge:

(spoken): And the sun rises!
From the dust unforgiving
A new age is born
Like fireflies to a fire
The futile are risen
(chant): We. Can't. See. The. Light.

I personally thought that was a bit cliche...

Next one:

Blood Fight:

Verse 1:

Fly in the shadows,
Soar under the clouds
Cause the cause we are fighting for
Is something we're dying for
Fire the missiles
Deflecting the bombshells
Waves of radiation unending flames
The sky with bullets is ending our dreams

Chorus:

Far out beyond the stratosphere
There's recollection of flickering lights
Left behind by a jetstream
Of undying focus
Sent to ascending away
To the night sky

Verse 2:

Forgive our treason!
Another unending reason
Circling down in a graveyard spiral
To end in explosive collapse of the sky
Taking the blood path
Bullets showing off our wrath
Navigational instruments can't help us now
We are the soldiers which faith has made proud

Bridge:

Undone!
With a metal fist the tides of war are turning
Anti-aircraft and nuclear missiles are leaving our sad world burning
Raining death and flying through blood
The red mist mixed in with the cloud vapor
Explosions, flickering lights,
The mark of our downfall
Red covers our fight
(outro guitar solo)

Heavenly Holocaust:

Verse:

In-born vengeance seraphim
Crying out to the fiery reaches of what is within
In the glory of our heavenly father
We strike with reckless abandon
On those unfit for freedom
Or doomed to Abbaddon

Chorus:

From the darkness of our minds
Our children are taught
Singing mother and father
Heavenly holocaust
In the fires of brain cells
Our bullets are lost
Screaming brothers and sisters
Heavenly holocaust

Bridge:

Heavenly holocaust!
Free them from their abusers
The righteous will lead the way
Down with the infidels
Defilers who know not the way of enlightenment
Feel the fire
As we shatter your vertebrae
Heavenly holocaust!
There can only be one salvation
Hallelujah shrieks the new generation

Repeat chorus
#2
Far out beyond the stratosphere
There's recollection of flickering lights
Left behind by a jetstream
Of undying focus
Sent to ascending away
To the night sky

I'm not sure how this relates to the rest of the song. Maybe tie in somehow. A pre-chorus might do it. It just completely changes the feel to go from the verse to the chorus. That can be good, but it's such a drastic change that it doesn't feel like it fits.