#1
A pretty raw piece I put together yesterday. I've not really done a song with that level of fingerpicking before (even though it's not that crazy) but I think it turned out quite nicely. C4C, I always return any crit
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wBeptO0AfY0&context=C432e24dADvjVQa1PpcFODF04bPaS44YJ5E3XjMv6G9XETc5rMs8Y=
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#2
I really enjoyed it. The lyrics are like the strongest part of the song in my opinion but it's arranged all very nicely.

If you want me to say something on the video I'd be glad to.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1525826 if you wanna take a listen and just post your crit in the thread that would be great.
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#3
Quote by will42
I really enjoyed it. The lyrics are like the strongest part of the song in my opinion but it's arranged all very nicely.

If you want me to say something on the video I'd be glad to.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1525826 if you wanna take a listen and just post your crit in the thread that would be great.

Thanks very much, if you could drop a quick comment on the video that would be awesome
I actually saw your thread earlier and tried to listen, but my computer/internet seems to have a problem with the site you're using. I'll try again tomorrow if that's cool
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#4
Nice song dude. The lyrics are really good, I feel that if you revised over them a couple more times you could come out with some amazing poetry there. The melody and guitar playing is cool, but again it seems unfinished IMHO. There's so much you could do with a song like this dude. I really liked the occasional dissonant chord change, you should expand that sort of creative thinking into your fingerpicking and strumming patterns to brighten them up a little.

Anyway, solid song but i'd like to see you expand and develop it further. So much potential!
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#5
Quote by cammo_1234
Nice song dude. The lyrics are really good, I feel that if you revised over them a couple more times you could come out with some amazing poetry there. The melody and guitar playing is cool, but again it seems unfinished IMHO. There's so much you could do with a song like this dude. I really liked the occasional dissonant chord change, you should expand that sort of creative thinking into your fingerpicking and strumming patterns to brighten them up a little.

Anyway, solid song but i'd like to see you expand and develop it further. So much potential!
Check out my work if you get a spare sec
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1521141

Cheers man, checking it out now
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#6
Quote by Paddy McK
A pretty raw piece I put together yesterday. I've not really done a song with that level of fingerpicking before (even though it's not that crazy) but I think it turned out quite nicely. C4C, I always return any crit
Cheers
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wBeptO0AfY0&context=C432e24dADvjVQa1PpcFODF04bPaS44YJ5E3XjMv6G9XETc5rMs8Y=

chill piece man! Itc nice to listen to music were lyrics actually mean something rather just being there just for the vocals sake! Only criticism i cab really give you is that try get rid of that sound what you get when you change chords ( that sound what you get when your finger tips hit the strings when you change chords)


Check out my thread please!!! ( or the links on my signature)
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1525320
Last edited by jani92jani at Mar 12, 2012,
#7
Quote by jani92jani
chill piece man! Itc nice to listen to music were lyrics actually mean something rather just being there just for the vocals sake! Only criticism i cab really give you is that try get rid of that sound what you get when you change chords ( that sound what you get when your finger tips hit the strings when you change chords)


Check out my thread please!!! ( or the links on my signature)
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1525320

I did consider EQing out the string scrapes, but I decided not to cos I wanted to keep the piece in its raw state. The scrapes are pretty severe though, I might look at remixing it to try and reduce them.
I already posted in that thread when you posted it, so I'll drop a comment on one of your other pieces
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