Amuro Jay
JOHNNY STOCK
Join date: Apr 2006
8,211 IQ
#1
Track I've been working on for a bit. Kind of in the vein of my last track East End, lots of clean tapping and sliding, etc.

Drums were written by TheReverend724 and bass was written by InstantAxonHero

c4c

EDIT: I'd also really like to know what it sounds like I was influenced by, specifically the guitar parts, because I know it sounds nothing like AF.
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clouds4mix.gp5
world-ablaze
Registered User
Join date: Sep 2011
112 IQ
#3
This is totally awesome, dude. I've been absent from UG lately and haven't posted a song in like 2 months or something....but I saw this only had one reply and it made me sad, because its a great song. I agree with TheReverend724, you have a knack for the twinkly stuff It reminded me a little bit of the band Castevet btw, but I'm not sure why (it's not that similar...).
Subguy
Blood Elf Bassist
Join date: Jun 2007
403 IQ
#4
just listened to AF before you i checked the forum, it doesn't really have to do anything with AF itself but you captured the emo pretty good, i really enjoyed it, and i don't have something to crit. i always wanted to write emo songs musically myself but i have no idea how to.
Stickynotez
meh
Join date: Mar 2011
22 IQ
#6
Wow, man. I really like how this turned out. Rev did a great job with the drums, and the bass fits very well. Obviously, the guitars are great too. Really good job, everyone.
Amuro Jay
JOHNNY STOCK
Join date: Apr 2006
8,211 IQ
#7
Quote by TheReverend724
great shit dude


I'm not exaggerating when I say you're really improving. You've got a knack for this twinkly shit
Thanks. And again, I can't thank you enough for the work you do with my drum tracks.
Quote by world-ablaze
This is totally awesome, dude. I've been absent from UG lately and haven't posted a song in like 2 months or something....but I saw this only had one reply and it made me sad, because its a great song. I agree with TheReverend724, you have a knack for the twinkly stuff It reminded me a little bit of the band Castevet btw, but I'm not sure why (it's not that similar...).
Thanks man, I appreciate it. I'll check out that band, too.
Quote by Subguy
just listened to AF before you i checked the forum, it doesn't really have to do anything with AF itself but you captured the emo pretty good, i really enjoyed it, and i don't have something to crit. i always wanted to write emo songs musically myself but i have no idea how to.
You're right, it doesn't. I tried to use some of the same techniques as them (using a lot of ringing notes, sliding, clean guitars, etc) but I executed it in a completely different manner. And thanks.
Quote by Mean Mr Mustard
Man, so relaxing and chill. I can't really pick up any influences really, but it was nice.
Thanks bro. I'm happy that you've liked my last two tracks. And when you said you can't pick up any influences, that makes me happy too. Means I'm not blatantly ripping off of anyone yet
Quote by Stickynotez
Wow, man. I really like how this turned out. Rev did a great job with the drums, and the bass fits very well. Obviously, the guitars are great too. Really good job, everyone.
Thanks Sticky. I really do appreciate the work you put into the bass track you wrote as well, but John approached me for it and he and I go back a bit.
Stickynotez
meh
Join date: Mar 2011
22 IQ
#8
Quote by jetfuel495
Thanks Sticky. I really do appreciate the work you put into the bass track you wrote as well, but John approached me for it and he and I go back a bit.

No, man. You made the right choice. I like what he did a lot better than what I wrote. Mine took about an hour, and was consequently very simple and uninteresting.
Seb1uk
Registered User
Join date: Aug 2007
4,004 IQ
#9
Right finally getting to returning the crit.

Really nice feel in the intro, the drums really gets me in the mood. Makes me think of Toe, if you're looking for what this sounds like.

The guitar melodies are just really mellow and nice, bars 38-39 are real nice in particular. The section starting at bar 42 has to be my favourite bit, and once again, the drums really compliment it, as well as the bass. It flows into the next section real nice.

Not sure if I like the drum break when the distortion kicks in. I think the drums need to go along with the guitars, like, crashes on the chords and drum rolls on the dead notes sorta thing. That's just the kinda thing I'd imagine would work better. But nice chord sequence.

I don't think I liked the outro, like, it was a bit of an odd fade out. I think you could do without a fade out and just ended it with four strums on the 2-4-4-4 chord like bar 97. Again, that's personal preference but maybe you'd like that.

But overall, real nice piece, the bass really does a nice job and the drums play a big role here too. Then of course the guitar melodies themselves work really well together as well. Nice one on that one man, only a few very slight issuess I have with it, but it's still great.
chronos1989
Registered User
Join date: Dec 2011
196 IQ
#10
I Really liked it, I mean the guitars were clean and smooth.. so calm in such an atmospheric way. I then understood the name, Clouds. Love the drums, love the bass, Loved the song as a whole. The outro was quite simple but it fits perfectly!.

Gratz
Last edited by chronos1989 at Apr 1, 2012,
Joshua1207
Hipster Jesus
Join date: Mar 2009
1,804 IQ
#11
Pretty good song overall. I don't usually listen to this stuff but I enjoyed it a lot, the only real complaint that I have is that the ending feels kind of half-assed, I felt as if you could of put some kind of build up and then slowly build back down and end it, if that makes sense.
I don't really have much to say besides that I really enjoyed the song so I won't ask for a critic in return, but keep up the work. Unique stuff you got.
Christopher S
Registered User
Join date: Oct 2010
880 IQ
#12
The intro is basically very soothing, and when the drums ring in, I can't help to notice how well thought out the ride hits are. Great touch. When the drums come in fully, it creates a very nice groove, without being spastic.

I'm not sure if I enjoy bar 34, the little pause, but it does add a distinct effect.

The layering next is simply brilliant, great melodies.

The sort of "break" with the deep chords is simply amazing, and when the tappy lead comes back in, its breathtaking.

Simply put, I really adore this little piece. Great work, man.

C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1530535