It's in those moments
when his cheek presses against the top of her chest
that she almost feels guilty
It'll pass soon
Silly boy, with all his hopes and dreams
I'll make a man out of him

He's just counting her heartbeats
so he knows when she's really asleep
but he waits just a minute longer
just another minute to remember the way she feels
She's all his
and she loves him
but she won't look for him
I don't feel like the emotions you're putting across are really articulated here. They're either not described in a well enough way, or not straight up blunt enough to punch me in the face.

Raichu still rules, though.