The guitar track has to be really tighter, I dig your sound but the whole thing is not really understandable, try to play with a metronome and try to adjust your sound. I don't want to be mean or anything and I hope you understand ^^
I agree with them. Try using a metronome. And maybe working on the volumes of each guitar and their timing. That's as far as the recording goes, which you yourself said it was sloppy, and believe me I know about recording sloppy stuff xD.

As for the ideas I like em, it would be nice to hear them with the rest of the instruments and stuff. I especially liked that last part at 2:32, I like that progression and the way a solo fits there, just needs work. Out of curiosity, were you guys improvising?

Anyways, good stuff, just needs work to make it sound better and cleaner, so every note can be understood to get a better idea of what you're trying to do. If you get a chance check out my stuff! https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1526635