Your guitar sounds either out of tune or just old and crusty. Maybe thats the sound youre going for? As far as the song, it definitely has a garage sound and feel to it. A proper recording and correct volume levels would really clean it up nicely. I couldnt really hear the lyrics so i cant comment on those. Overall, its got potential but needs a proper clean up.
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Dude, tune that sucker up! The timing was a little sketchy in the intro, but picked up when the drum beat fully kicked in. Interesting voice, no real pitch issues, but I had no idea what you were singing about. The guitar solo needs work. Some parts sounded completely out of key, and the timing and phasing of your licks was sloppy. All that said, you could have a decent little pop/punky song here if you polished it up.

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