#1
This song is kinda cliche pop song meant to make people feel better when they're having a bad day, tell me what you think of it guys??

Step out of that fog your stuck in. Oh everything's gonna be alright
Call up an old friend, don't leave them lonely through the middle of the night.
Just keep your head held high
Never hang it low
All you can do is try
That hurt will never show

And even through the sting of the pain
A caged bird finds a reason to sing
Everything's gonna be alright
Everything's gonna be alright
And even through the sting of the pain
You'll find another way
All you can do is try
All you can do is try
Ohh oh
Ohh oh

We know you've seen bad times
We know that you've seen the good
Life is not a chrime
Live it as you should
We know that there is darkness
Find the light that's down inside
If you never do succeed
you can't say you never tried
Oh

And even through the sting of the pain
A caged bird finds a reason to sing
You know it's gonna be alright
You know it's gonna be alright
And even in the pourin rain
You can get off that train
Don't you ever cry
Don't you ever cry
Ohh oh

(sing for me caged bird)
*Solo*

And even through the sting of the pain
A caged bird finds a reason to sing
Everything's gonna be alright
Everything's gonna be alright
And even on a stormy night
You'll find a way to make it right
Go on and just live your life
Go on and just live your life
Ohhh
"When the power of love over comes the love of power the world will know peace."
~Jimi Hendrix
Last edited by JakePlaysGuitar at Mar 29, 2012,
#2
I'd love some crit on this one guys
"When the power of love over comes the love of power the world will know peace."
~Jimi Hendrix
#3
Honestly, it's not my style, but I'll offer what feedback I can, I don't like to see work go uncommented on.

Normally pop songs come off very forced, but it was really pleasant to see that the rhymes seemed to come naturally and not with so much effort. I'm sure it'll translate really well to the song.

Everything seems about right for a pop song, but I can't help but feel that it's a tad bit nonspecific and cliche. I dunno, it's all about what it means to you.

Sorry I'm not of more help!
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#5
Life is not a chrime
I assume you meant "crime".

Anyway...I like how Chorus 1, Chorus 2, and Chorus 3 are all similar but not exactly the same. Chorus 3 ends it perfectly. It's like playing a major progression and ending with the I chord. Well done!
#6
Thanks so much guys And when I say pop I don't mean katy perry or jb, I mean john mayer or bruno mars style lol. If there are anyways to improve this let me know, and I do crit for crit btw
"When the power of love over comes the love of power the world will know peace."
~Jimi Hendrix
#8
No problem dude, great pieces you have there!
"When the power of love over comes the love of power the world will know peace."
~Jimi Hendrix
#10
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Sorry I'm not of more help!

Not a problem friend, just by viewing this is helping me, I appreciate it
"When the power of love over comes the love of power the world will know peace."
~Jimi Hendrix