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alright so i recently broke off a 3 yr relationship of which i pretty much set playing music aside through the whole thing... well ive been back at it now and was looking through some old songs i had written and stumbled across this one.. oddly enough i had written it after my last break up
just want to know what you all think of it
too repetitive?

"Forgotten Heart"

Hold me now and I will sing about the one I loved
The one I held every night, just like I am now

Hold me now I just need something to light up my life
Take me away and let me forget, this bottle I have in my hand

So fill me up, and replace this forgotten heart
Before this night, it was all torn apart
Erase what was, once you--inside of me
Erase what I, thought that we had to be

Holding now the bottle I used, to fill the empty inside
It covered the black with only more, of the darkest lies

Hold me now I just need something to light up my life
Take me away and let me see, this bottle I have in my hand

So fill me up, and replace this forgotten heart
Before this night, it was all torn apart
Erase what was, once you--inside of me
Erase what I, thought that we had to be

Hold me now and I will sing about the one that I had
The one I hurt the one I loved, the one I’ll never have back
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actually im going to throw this one in there too i wrote it sometime back years ago too, i like it because i feel many different situations could connect with it. maybe change "girl i lost" to "one i lost" ?

"Saving Goodbye"

Hey can you see that light in my eye softly saying goodbye
Laughing at me for the girl I lost but that’s not what I chose

Oh but I can never let it die, I’m just trying to save goodbye , just saving goodbye

Hey can you see where I’ve come from I’m holding on much too tight
Never letting it clear my mind it all still seems so close

Oh but I can never let it die, I’m just trying to save goodbye , just saving goodbye

Hey can you see the fire inside, that’s slowly started to die
Leaving you so bitter cold alone as alone so alone

Oh but I can never let it die, I’m just trying to save goodbye , just saving goodbye
Oh but I can never let it die, I’m just trying to save goodbye , just saving goodbye
Last edited by ibanez_gtrs at Apr 5, 2012,