Well considering music is so subjective it's hard to say where you could make this better if you follow what I mean. Personally I would maybe re-write the beginning solo, change the drums in what I presume is the verse? But apart from that I like the intro/verse riff, you could perhaps take that and create a more rock/electric guitar sound? Like don't fear the reaper? IF you do make sure you post so I can hear!
yeh man, the solo was bad i just improvised (poorly) yeh i was definitely thinking about changing the drums and adding electric guitar, Thanks