#1
I wrote this song a while ago. Just thought I'd put it up and see what you think! Its about this girl...

I think about you everynight
wishing one day I'd hold you tight
why can't I get over you?
And all the shit that we've been through

I just can't stop chasing dreams.
I can barely go on without you
I'd do anything for you
anything for you

You're on my mind all day long
and now I'm sittin here writting you this song
One day maybe you could be mine
And we'd have the best of times

I just can't stop chasing dreams
I can barely go on without you
I'd do anything for you
anything for you


Suggestions would be great! its not done yet... I just found it from 6 months or so ago...
#2
I like it, though too many "you"s at the end of the choruses would bother me. Also not sure if swearing in a love song sounds as romantic.