#1
Another day, I hear myself cry,
Alone in my room, with tight shut eyes.
I say that I'm fine, but it's all just a lie,
I've figured it out - I want to die.

Is this the solution? Not that it matters.
My heart has been shattered and life left in tatters.
With numbing thoughts of guilt and shame,
I realise who is really to blame.

My thoughts were euphoric in a world laced with bliss,
Till you came along and I longed for your kiss.
But despite your scars on my mind and my wrists,
I cannot blame you. It was me who did this.

I've been here before a lot in the past.
Love is a race, and I always come last.
This time, it seems, I can stand no more,
My mind is set. I lost the war.

My world is a nightmare and nobody cares.
I take a deep breath as I kick out the chair.
My vision is fading, my lungs become bare,
The imminent end to a life of despair.


It's about suicide, obviously. First thing of the like I've ever written. Thoughts?
Last edited by JD2k9 at Apr 14, 2012,
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Change your threat title to comply with the rules of the forum, please. You'll get more views and comments this way (we often just ignore threads that break the rules.)
マリ「しあわっせはーあるいってこないだーからあるいってゆっくんだねーん 
いっちにっちいっぽみーかでさんぽ
 さーんぽすすんでにっほさっがるー 
じーんせいはっわんつー!ぱんち・・・


"Success is as dangerous as failure. Hope is as hollow as fear." - from Tao Te Ching