TheBigProjekt
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Join date: Jun 2009
100 IQ
#1
Decided to try something new, and this came out. I'l gladly C4C if you leave a link and at least attempt to crit :P.

Thanks!
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StrumThatFender
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Join date: Feb 2011
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#2
I enjoyed it. The song has great atmosphere. The chorus and outro are amazing, I thought. One thing though, is the vocals sound very similar throughout the entire song, maybe you could change it slightly in some parts. Have you wrote any lyrics for this yet? You should write some if not. Nice job!
TheBigProjekt
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#3
Thanks man! I really appreciate it. I do have lyrics written for it, but I prefer to just keep them in a notebook and write them whenever I feel motivated, then just put the melody in to remember it, haha. Thanks again for the crit, did you have something you wanted me to listen for you?
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Rokkstar
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Join date: Feb 2011
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#4
First off, I updated the original post to link to the video and the video links to the FB page Thanks for the critique. Here's the link to the video: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UeZKXlWHGng

Now, on to my crit.

I love the way the third root note wasn't what I was expecting 9 adds in some atmosphere dude. I love the way it starts. I love the vocal melodies too. I wish you had the words nailed into the tab so I could read them. At 31 I would bend my voice up from the 3 to 5 and back down to the 3 to add some slight soul to it. 41 is a fantastic chorus it's so like mellow sad catchy. And the bass is doing some sick groove dude. lol It's like.. raise drop. For some reason sometimes the vocals cut out during the chorus... I don't know why... It's the only tab I have open. Whatever though I kept replaying til it worked. The acoustic sounds like a boss underneath the second verse. I like how 81 wasn't the chorus again. I like the piano during the part at 89 and on. But I feel like it could've used the chorus one more time. Or whatever that climax was. GOOD JOB NONETHELESS...

Great track. Loved it.